Would you believe me if I told you that the wife was beating her husband? Not the other way around? :D But thank you for the critic. I'll try working on that soon. Probably clear up a few more things too. Thanks!

nice and simple i like it:)

just as strong as an expensive glass of scotch:) i like to read these strong emotional poems of yours. the best thing is you have managed to tell a story by not telling anything. we wonder who these people are and excactly what they do. you feel like knowing more. A job well done:)